I think this would be very understandable to someone without any of the physics knowledge, by just dumbing it down to:
> Fortunately, 2,000 MW of electricity is coming online by August 1, per the California Public Utility Commission. Much of this will have four hours of battery time sitting behind it, nearly 8,000 MWh in total.
Or alternatively, by using the correct physics terms where applicable:
> Fortunately, 2,000 MW of peak power capacity is coming online by August 1, per the California Public Utility Commission. Much of this capacity will have four hours of battery energy sitting behind it, providing nearly 8,000 MWh of energy in total.
But as is, the author provided the worst of both worlds. To me as a reader, I read "2000 MW of energy storage capacity", stumbled over that, then read on to "8000 MWh in total", understood that that is actually the storage capacity, then had to go back to "2000 MW" to understand that they meant "power", not "energy", to make sense of this whole two-sentence section.
So yes, this all does make sense. After reading it multiple times, some of which are back to front. The information is in there, but it certainly isn't clear or up-front.