I think you just need a squirrel nibbling on the excel logo.
Help me improve my comic ad
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#12Go for less text. More http://www.smbc-comics.com less http://www.qwantz.com/ . The current template requires way too much. I am pretty sure the technical term is 'excel ninja' and not 'excel kung fu' too. But I guess that was the punchline? I am just confused. Maybe some work place humor? My 1 minute half baked attempt would be something like... "With Query Cell, I've pumped up excel power user level to over 9000! I…
Thanks joez,
Of course! how did I miss adding a ninja reference :)
The links definitely make your point about the amount of text :)
Re: Help me improve my comic ad
#13Go for less text. More http://www.smbc-comics.com less http://www.qwantz.com/ . The current template requires way too much. I am pretty sure the technical term is 'excel ninja' and not 'excel kung fu' too. But I guess that was the punchline? I am just confused. Maybe some work place humor? My 1 minute half baked attempt would be something like... "With Query Cell, I've pumped up excel power user level to over 9000! I…
I think the main problem is that there ISN'T a punchline.
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#14I think you just need a squirrel nibbling on the excel logo.
Noted : Add one Squirrel.
Are you Scott Adams ?
Re: Help me improve my comic ad
#15Go for less text. More http://www.smbc-comics.com less http://www.qwantz.com/ . The current template requires way too much. I am pretty sure the technical term is 'excel ninja' and not 'excel kung fu' too. But I guess that was the punchline? I am just confused. Maybe some work place humor? My 1 minute half baked attempt would be something like... "With Query Cell, I've pumped up excel power user level to over 9000! I…
I agree with this being too long. When I see an ad which is a comic I instinctively expect it to be cheesy which is the impression I got with this. One panel might work if it is silly enough (SMBC style) or maybe 3 panels if you think up a good pun/punchline.
Re: Help me improve my comic ad
#16Hi, I paid to have a 1 page comic drawn to help promote my startup product. The artist did a great job but I think the concept / dialogue that I came up with is not as great. Check it out and see if you can come up with something better. Thanks SamH
you need:
1) less text (as others have mentioned)
and 2) a punchline. Perhaps involving a scenario where the programmer tells the boss that he's using SQL in Excel, causing the boss to irrationally fear that powerful programs are breeding with each other (from which the only logical conclusion is Skynet), and he starts making preparations for an apocalypse-grade bunker while the programmer is trying to reassure him that it's merely some awesome product that will blow his wig off when he buys a copy.
In my humble opinion, you need to have some sort of engaging scenario that will keep people reading through the pitch, and then you need to pay off with a punchline.
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#17others have made good points (too much text/text too small, also, you need a funny punchline.)
I have something to add, though; how does this fit into the rest of your branding? I mean, lately I've been getting a whole lot of customers. The other day, some guy on twitter pointed me out as 'an excellent example of niche branding.'
Now, Personally, I chose my style (that is, the minimal theme, figlet instead of graphics) because I have no taste, but it is a consistent style that I maintain across my website, advertisements, business cards, and even T shirts.