I know this is somewhat covered in another comment, but, the concepts described in the post could have been reduced quite a bit, no offense Dan. While I like the writing generally, I would consider writing and then letting it sit for a few days, rereading, and then cutting chaff (editing). This feels like a great first draft but without feedback, and could have greatly benefited from an editing process, and I think u…
I know my style is verbose but I try to include enough details to substantiate the argument at the level that I feel confident it fully stands for itself. If others find something useful in it, I trust that they can riff on those bits or simplify.