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Re: Poor writing, not specialized concepts, drives difficulty with legal language

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The assumption of most of the comments here is that bad writing is a matter of incompetence, but in the case of public policy I think Hanlon's Razor no longer applies. Given what we know about Texas politics and American ballot measures in general, it's quite possible that the ambiguity was introduced deliberately to give big landowners (or rather their lawyers) extra wiggle room. If that's true then the only communi…

It's not even the writing - it can be blatant misinterpretation. There's precedential opinion that states that you can't ignore the letter of the law to pursue it's spirt. Yet there's a law that has "reasonable care" in it, but the precedential opinion on that is that it's a strict liability offense because 'applying reasonable care would frustrate enforcing the legislature's intent'... The judges don't care. They're…

A great example is Measure A which was passed in the last election a few months back in Santa Clara county:

> Shall the measure amending the Santa Clara Valley Water District Ordinance 11-01 to limit Board members to four successive four-year terms be adopted?

Term limits? Heck yes! Voters agreed: term limits are A GOOD THING. Measure A passed!

What wasn't mentioned AT ALL, anywhere in the question put to the voters, is that Santa Clara Valley Water District board members are already limited to 2 terms in office. This was extending term limits from 2 consecutive to 4 consecutive terms. It was getting rid of/weakening term limits. A blatant misrepresentation on the ballot.

Who wrote the text of Measure A? Why the Santa Clara Valley Water District board members who wanted their terms extended, of course.

Re: Poor writing, not specialized concepts, drives difficulty with legal language

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Here are the text complexity scores from different measures for this text. Flesch Reading Ease score: -24 (text scale) Flesch Reading Ease scored your text: impossible to comprehend. Gunning Fog: 40.7 (text scale) Gunning Fog scored your text: EXTREMELY difficult to read. Flesch-Kincaid Grade Level: 35.7 Grade level: College Graduate and above. The Coleman-Liau Index: 13 Grade level: college The SMOG Index: 25 Grade…

Are you suggesting that our legal system should be understandable by the dumbest person? I don't see how that's feasible or desirable.

No: That'd be impossible.

But it is reasonable to have these sorts of things understandable to the average high school graduate and to the average retiree (different schooling, different mental statuses). And by average, I truly mean that the range of average should be able to read it so that comprehension should be widespread.

If your average high school graduate cannot comprehend it, your wording is too difficult, your education too poor, your document was written by people without the skills to talk plainly, or a combination of these.

Re: Poor writing, not specialized concepts, drives difficulty with legal language

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For everyone commenting "laypeople aren't the intended audience", this monstrosity was a recent Texas constitutional ballot proposal, i.e. all voters in the state were asked to vote on it: > The constitutional amendment authorizing the legislature to provide for the reduction of the amount of a limitation on the total amount of ad valorem taxes that may be imposed for general elementary and secondary public school pu…

Here are the text complexity scores from different measures for this text. Flesch Reading Ease score: -24 (text scale) Flesch Reading Ease scored your text: impossible to comprehend. Gunning Fog: 40.7 (text scale) Gunning Fog scored your text: EXTREMELY difficult to read. Flesch-Kincaid Grade Level: 35.7 Grade level: College Graduate and above. The Coleman-Liau Index: 13 Grade level: college The SMOG Index: 25 Grade…

In case anyone wants to use these for some other writing...

Flesch Reading Ease score: https://www.textcompare.org/readability/flesch-kincaid-readi...

Gunning Fog: https://www.textcompare.org/readability/gunning-fog-score/

Flesch-Kincaid Grade Level: https://www.textcompare.org/readability/flesch-kincaid-grade...

The Coleman-Liau Index: https://www.textcompare.org/readability/coleman-liau-index

The SMOG Index: https://www.textcompare.org/readability/smog-index/

Automated Readability Index: https://www.textcompare.org/readability/automated-readabilit...

Linsear Write Formula : https://www.textcompare.org/readability/linsear-write/

The site actually seems to have quite a few different methods available, if you look at the footer.

This might actually help me with some of the writing in my own blog posts and such, to check whether any paragraphs don't get too convoluted.

Oh, also there's this site, which attempts to show you the particular sentences that might be hard to read: https://hemingwayapp.com/

Re: Poor writing, not specialized concepts, drives difficulty with legal language

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This is true, but as you say, the revolution started out the way rayiner describes it, and it seems very plausible that the 2nd. amendment was motivated by that specific circumstance. Personally, I think we would have been better off without the 2nd amendment, and the framers of the constitution may not have foreseen the role it has come to play in politics (if so, it would be far from the only case), but I cannot fi…

The framers didn’t anticipate armies becoming permanent institutions, which is why we have a “no standing army” requirement that we just kind of ignore. But even that only makes the second amendment clearer: if you don’t have a standing army, who has the guns? The answer is militias comprised of heavily armed citizenry.

I am pretty certain that the large military powers at the time (England, France certainly Prussia) had standing armies already. So I would be highly surprised that the founders did not anticipate armies as a permanent institution. That would be a pretty big blind spot, considering they already existed.

Re: Poor writing, not specialized concepts, drives difficulty with legal language

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For everyone commenting "laypeople aren't the intended audience", this monstrosity was a recent Texas constitutional ballot proposal, i.e. all voters in the state were asked to vote on it: > The constitutional amendment authorizing the legislature to provide for the reduction of the amount of a limitation on the total amount of ad valorem taxes that may be imposed for general elementary and secondary public school pu…

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Re: Poor writing, not specialized concepts, drives difficulty with legal language

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Long, readable phrases (in literature, anyway) tend to be made up of independent clauses with semicolons, and are perfectly understandable (to me, anyway). I sometimes prefer long sentences in some forms of literature - short sentences can be choppy and halting. "He was indistinctly conscious that the pardon of this priest was the greatest assault and the most formidable attack which had moved him yet; that his obdur…

Those semicolons can be replaced with periods and negates your point. That's just a string of ideas, not really one logical sentence.

I haven't earnestly studied English grammar to the same level I've studied Romanian grammar.

In Romanian you have "sentences" (noun - verb - etc) and "phrases" (multiple sentences together, basically they're separated only by periods). I think in English grammar "sentences" are called clauses?

Anyway, Romanian "sentences" are generally short, and if they're not, for sure that's bad style. Romanian "phrases" can be long, but depending on the structure of the "sentences" and the logical separation between them, they can be quite clear.

Maybe the same distinction makes sense here? "Sentences" (clauses?) should be relatively clear and short and somewhat independent, "phrases" can be long, but only if their individual components ("sentences") are of high quality on their own and if they're connected in clear ways.

Re: Poor writing, not specialized concepts, drives difficulty with legal language

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Are you suggesting that our legal system should be understandable by the dumbest person? I don't see how that's feasible or desirable.

Everyone is subject to the law. How can you have any hope of following a law you cannot read? It certainly should be a goal.

Like everyone else - from the most destitute individual to the most sophisticated megacorporation - you can ask someone more literate.

Re: Poor writing, not specialized concepts, drives difficulty with legal language

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For everyone commenting "laypeople aren't the intended audience", this monstrosity was a recent Texas constitutional ballot proposal, i.e. all voters in the state were asked to vote on it: > The constitutional amendment authorizing the legislature to provide for the reduction of the amount of a limitation on the total amount of ad valorem taxes that may be imposed for general elementary and secondary public school pu…

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