Maybe this is due to lack of context, but with all that "designed to improve your company performance in the critical area" and "investing heavily in great customer service and innovation" that email sounds terribly enterpriesey to me. It all could be boiled down to a one-liner in spirit of "Sorry, but we can't offer our services any cheaper. Our prices are indeed higher, but the services are better than competitors…
> Just my opinion. I'm not a businessman. It shows :) No offense, but this is an engineer's mindset. Great for building products; terrible for selling them. A businessperson's mindset is "if they don't understand their value proposition well enough to explain it to me, their product likely isn't any better than the competition and they know it." Better still, by explaining your value proposition in terms of a prospec…
You'd think a consequentialist businessman would be more interested in buying good things that go unrecognized/undervalued/un-understood by those who have them for sale. He can use the information asymmetry to make a profit, after all.