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It's not very good satire. Some of the points are potentially real; it's not clear why they wouldn't matter. When you label something "No offense intendend" and proceed to make offensive statements, your preface isn't helping. Prefacing something with small-font "this is toungue-in-cheek" and proceeding to mix potentially real issues with non-issues a novice isn't helpful. I don't see how spouting irrelevant nonsense…
> It's not very good satire. If it confused people then it IS very good satire. > Some of the points are potentially real; it's not clear why they wouldn't matter. That's the very essence of satire. It has to be somewhat connected to reality. What you seem to ask for is "grotesque statements" or "surreal humor".
It doesn't make sense as satire. It does as shallow griping.