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Out of curiosity, did you redact this with AI? It has all the telltale signs: lots of em-dashes but also "punched up" paragraphs, a lot of them end with a zinger, e.g. > Amazon folks are slightly more insulated, but not by much. The old Seattle deal—Amazon treats you poorly but pays you more—only masks the rot. or > Seattle has talent as good as anywhere. But in San Francisco, people still believe they can change the…
I wrote it by hand but I had an AI do some edits. I got the m dash drilled into me by my creative writing teacher in college.
I'm not sure why you needed it for edits though, since you seem good at writing generally.